The umpire was blind in one eye
On bad calls all we could do was sigh
He messed up the game
Every game is the same
I almost wish he would just go die.
On bad calls all we could do was sigh
He messed up the game
Every game is the same
I almost wish he would just go die.
9 comments:
James nicely done on this limrick. I liked the baseball theme and the great picture to go along with it. THe only part that was a little odd was the last line when you said that you want the umpire to go die. THat was a litle wierd. But otherwise the rhyming was well done.
This poem makes me think about baseball and how we won our game yesterday. After i read the poem i feel happy about playing baseball and i hate how some umpires suck. This poem used so good rhymes to point out how baseball umpires at our level suck and are terrible. This has been similar to some of the poems i've read because i've read many baseball poems such as fly ball, and the base stealer, which is in my poem analogy
"I almost wish he would just go die."
Sketchy... I thought limericks were suposed to be funny. Anyway, pretty good poem; actually made sense (contrair to most other's) and had a good rhyme scheme. "eye" and "sigh" aren't easily rhymed, by you seemed to flow through it. Good job Merc.
James this was a well written poem. I love how you chose baseball for your theme. The picture really nicely represents the theme. The only part I didn't like was the part about the umpire dieing. Other than that it was a well written poem with a nice rhyme scheme. Nice work!
Sweet limerick Jameson...The last line was a tad on the sketchy side, as you want to kill the umkpire. You need help. Anyways it was a nice limerick, and it had a nice flowing rhythm.
great limerick James, I thought you really got the good idea of the kind of poem, and I really enjoyed the baseball idea.
Some umps are totally blind, its just a fact of life.
I really enjoyed the line including "blind in one eye"
nice job
good limrick merc. i thought it was funny. It seem a bit cruel you wanted the umpire to go die, but what can i say. The poem remined me of the days i once played baseball, which i dont anymore, i play lacrosse like your bro.'Give it a try' Anyways i like how you made it ryhme im not sure but you might have been a little off on the sylobol count but w/e keep up the good work!
Jamie this limerick was good. It added a funny side to a serious side. I could see where you were coming from when you said how bad he was and you detailed the umpire in a funny way. I liked the line saying he was blind in one eye because that is a feature thats would totally limit an umps capability. I will say that the last line in which you stated you wish he'd die was pretty harsh.....After reading this I connected it to the sports I play like hockey and lacrosse and was able to connect because every once in a while you get one of those horrible refs.
Interesting to know.
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