The sun is shinning
Bright in the sky, it is time
To play golf again.
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- Mr. B-G
- “Man lowers his head and lunges into civilization, forgetting the days of his infancy when he sought truth in a snowflake or a stick. Man forgets the wisdom of the child.” - Jack Kerouac (1922 - 1969)
5 comments:
I really liked the fact that you used short simple words for your poem and also that you decided to use a haiku to post onto the blog!! But altogether you poem was super dee duper!!
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Pretty good haiku, but I could not distinguish between the golf aspect and the weather aspect. Is it about perfect weather about golf? If so, it is pretty good. If it is about the sun, the golf aspect made no sense. Don't finish a poem on a completely different subject. I assume it is about Golf Weather, so I liked it.
After reading this poem, it made me think golf is only played in bright warm weather. Zach knows this isn’t the case, but with such a short style poem it was misleading. I envisioned a golfer, looking up at the sky after a long winter, finally getting the chance to play the sport he loves. This poem effectively showed that golf is a calm sport that many people play to relax themselves. After reading this poem, I sort of wanted to go out and play a couple holes over at the Orchards, if it was sunny. This poem doesn’t remind me of anything else, but that doesn’t take away from its easy-going simplicity. Well done Zach.
I really like how this poem is very simple. You did a great job getting your point across without unneeded extra words. It made me think of a warm spring day, when the sun is shining and the snow has finally melted. There is almost a sense of relief in your poem that the sun is shining and it is time to play golf again. Good job.
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