What a motley group of teens
(And of course two pets)
Some look like their patience weans
With the animals I met
The one on the right is Foximus!
The left: well I forget his name…
But he was one who said, “I am Spartacus!”
And I guess that’s a shame…
With my pets on my shoulder
And my fellow comrades by my side
I will ride out like a soldier!
Be wary of my tide!
Having pets on my shoulder may be sketchy
But I am proud for my everlasting Chi!
6 comments:
your poem is really wierd. I dont know who would be this in love with stuff animals. you are one weird kid. by you did used good words in the poem and the rhythym was great. This was a weird but great sonnet
p drag. writing a poem about stuffed animals chilling with you is kinda sketchy. non the less it was a descent poemwith some good, creatie rymes.
pdrag this poem was a little strange, but showed you have a true passion for mr beegs's animals, which is also strange. After reading this poem, I look back and remember just how funny it was, and mr bg's reply with a simple, "thats sketchy." After reading this poem I cant help but feel you need a new love in your life, and you might have to let the animals go. This clearly does not remind me of anything else I have ever read, because of its incredibly unique topic.
wow pat. i immediately thought of the day when mr. b-g wwas taking pictures of you with the animals. I was really impressed with how well you stayed within the rhyme scheme and syllable requirements of a sonnet and still were able to write a good poem. This poem made me laugh just because the topic was so funny. it really doesn't remind me of anything else i've ever read, because i don't know anybody else who's as in love with mr. b-g's stuffed animals as you are.
Insightful and witty commentary Connie.
It should be noted that Pat does deviate from the 10-syllable-per-line requirement of a Shakespearian sonnet, although his rhyme scheme is right on.
Dragon, this poem makes no sense, but I thought it was great.
There were creative rhymes in there, though they sort of went away from topic sometime, they were still good.
The imagery? What else, you and the stuffed animals Foximus and Sparticus.
I also would like to say I enjoyed the last two lines a lot. Though I really kind of want to know now...how do those animals provide good chi?
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