Santiago and Manolin are back, for a whirlwind adventure, in the book An Old Man, a Young Man, and the Seaizzle. The two fishermen are working together full time, and are a big success. They become the best of friends, one that seems that will last forever. But with success, comes downfall, and unfortunately bad luck is around the corner. During a celebrating fishing trip, consisting of the old man and the boy, a terrible hurricane strikes and endangers them. Although they are in physical harm, their friendship is the only thing that will save them.It started off as a celebration boat ride, just Santiago and Manolin. They were celebrating breaking their record of 50 fish in just one week! They were having a great time until a hurricane came and wrecked their boat. When they woke up they were on a mysterious island. At the start of there adventure on the island, Santiago and Manolin’s friendship started strong, but slowly degraded, as their savage instincts kicked in. Not too long after, paranoia began to wiggle in Manolins mind: "Manolin sat on the ground and shakes, softly saying he’s going to kill me, there all going to kill me."(Page 76)As days progressed, Manolins paranoia only got worse and so did their friendship.
They went from enemies to obsessive enemies who watched the other persons every move. Since there friendship was disintegrated and all they could think about was what the other person was doing, and did nothing to try to improve there chance of rescue or any prepare for the future. "The food is running low. In 4 days there will be nothing left thought Santiago" (Page 134). Santiago turns mad (mentally) and when Manolins back is turned, uses a sharp rock and almost slashes Manolin. He realizes what a savage he becomes and realizes he needs to be friends with Manolin if they ever want to get off the island.
After things cooled down, slowly but steadily their friendship strengthened, and in time, it became greater than ever! Since they were best friends, When Manolin and Santiago started acting like friends, hope finally saw the light of day. They stopped hating each other, and started to work off the island. “It’s good that the monsters have left us, and that we can finally unite to get out of here." (Page 178) Every night they started a fire so that maybe a search team would find them. But that didn’t work. With teamwork though, they found more food to last them awhile! One day on the island, there is a terrible storm. Santiago and Manolin hide from it, and survive. When they walk back to the beach they see a dead seaizzle. They come up with an idea to use its skin to make a raft. After many hours of work, and with a strong friendship they made one and sailed off.
Friendship; Friendship is something that we take for granted, and as we saw their friendship is the only thing that mattered for survival on the island, and when it got restored again, Manolin and Santiago finally had a chance to get.
5 comments:
Wylee..
Your thesis statement is kind of weak, but i can still tell what it is. Friendship.
But, I feel as if you were just telling a story rather than writing any essay. With your quotes, you didn't have any that made sense at all.
I think that you misunderstood the quoting. You were supposoed to take quotes from the actual book, not from your own book that you made quotes from.
You seem to have a real knack for story writing, but this was supsoed to be an essay.
Wow, Wylee, this was sure entertaining! Well, I can see where you're going with the thesis. I agree with Nicole a little that it was a tad bit weak, but no biggy. I liked that quote about the monsters, but weren't the quotes supposed to be from the book (that's the whole purpose)? I think you did a good job showing Manolin and Santiago's friendship but the seaizzle kind of scared me. I dunno. But... yeah. I'm not trying to be mean, but next time, try actually writing an essay rather than a creative writing kind of piece. But good job, good job. Keep up the happy =).
your thesis statement may have been a little hard to distinguish but the rest of the story made up for it. my favorite quote was where Manolin is sitting on the ground and saying he is going to kill me, i think it shows the state of mind he was in very well. i liked how creative you were in wirting this story with the seaizzle and all. for next time i might say to make it more into an essay while still having an entertaining kick on the story.
Very nice Wylee, I enjoyed reading it. The thesis really only appears right at the end. Perhaps you could have placed it in your introductory paragraph to help readers recognize it more clearly.
I guess my preffered quote is on page (76) "...they're all going to kill me." It shows Manolins immense mental breakdown, and that paranoia is creeping in.
This essay in particular engages the reader and carves a path for them to read more. Looking back, I want this book to actually be made.
It is very enticing, and a hard prompt to come up with.
Kudos to you.
My only criticism is the thesis.
Other than that, it has been developed nicely and is a very good essay. next time, just make your thesis a bit more clear.
Wylee, I really liked your story. I think you are a very good writer that uses good detail to explain your story, but I agree with Pont about the thesis. For further reference you shoud maybe put it in the introduction to start off then go off from there. I iked your picture too, and it made it more enticing. Good story.
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