Monday, March 5, 2007

By Jacob P.

In the captivating novella, The Old Man and the Sea, author Ernest Hemingway creates an astute character by the name of Santiago. Santiago is what most people call and old man, and thus is referred to as one, hence the books title. Like all protagonists however, Santiago faces different obstacles throughout the book. They cast a strenuous task on his physical abilities, as well as his mental. Santiago’s challenges include; coming to terms with his old age, keeping his sanity while at sea alone, and surviving under harsh conditions of a fisherman. Thus you could say since these problems derive from the sea, that the sea is Santiago's biggest obstacle.

Santiago was and always will be a man of the sea. In his youth he was a respected man, with a plethora of energy. He had once been in an arm wrestling contest for two days straight. However, time has taken a toll on his body and he is not quite what he used to be. This is a serious problem for Santiago as must fish to make a living. Throughout his days at sea he physically becomes weaker and he must eventually accept his dilemma. He is an old man who has been weakened by time and his fishing will never be as successful as it once was, as long as he does it alone. One of the biggest problems he faces is that his left hand, which is vital for fishing, becomes cramped. "...his left hand was cramped...' "What kind of hand is that, cramp then, if you want to." ' " (58) Santiago, despite the truth, brushes it off until he goes without sleep and realizes the threat of his old body at sea.

Another obstacle Santiago must obliterate is that he must maintain his sanity out at sea. Every day his is out there with that one fish, his mind grows wearier. Santiago is constantly forced to substitute inanimate objects for real beings to shadow his loneliness. For instance he talks to his cramped hand often, ' " Be patient hand, I do this for you." ' (59) As well as his hand Santiago also talks to himself in the "second person", where he replaces the word "I" for "You". ' "You better be fearless and confident in yourself old man," ' (84) However unhealthy it may seem, it does good for him, as he does not have to be completely alone at sea. Doing things such as these help him forget that he is the only one out there, and he has no help at all. Santiago is forced to do such things to keep sane. For if he had lack of sanity, his fishing would be more dangerous than it is. He would become unclear in the head, and maybe make devastating mistakes that could cost him his life.

Santiago's other big problem is that he is in a small skiff alone, with minimal supplies, and he must survive the sea. Foolishly he has taken few foodstuffs and water and becomes malnourished. Santiago has enough nourishment to keep alive, but his health decreases as he just has the bare minimum of food, and is running out. He has also not packed any form of first-aid, and faces a lacerated and cramped hand due for possible infection. Of course when under these conditions you must stay alert to protect yourself. However, Santiago says, “If [I] do not sleep [I] might become unclear in the head.” (77) Santiago has it bad enough, but the fact that he devises a way to sleep vastly increases the threat to his life. While asleep, the marlin he hooked could do any number of things such as change directions in the night, and Santiago might not know which way to turn back home.

Santiago faces all of these challenges from one source, the sea. Thus you could reason that Santiago’s obstacle is the Sea, and within it are sub-obstacles that he faces. All of the difficulties except for his age however, are derived from the sea. (His hand cramps and lacerations, his sanity and malnourishment.) Santiago faces difficulties like all characters but because the thing which torments him is also the same thing he needs to live, it makes his dilemma rather original.

4 comments:

Anonymous said...

Jacob, you’ve done a very good job writing this story and you rephrased the thesis statement very well. I really liked the descriptive words you used and my favorite quote that you used was the one where Santiago talks to himself in the “second person.”
One thing I really liked about your piece is the word choice that you had. I thought your words were really amazing and descriptive. I don’t really have any advices for you. Other than that it was really good.

Anonymous said...

Your thesis was focused and you stayed with it throughout your essay. Out of your quotes I liked the ones where he needs to talk to himself and his hand.

I like how you have a good writing style and use a lot of strong vocabulary making it sound like a college student wrote it instead of a freshman in high school.

Anonymous said...

The thesis statement in your essay is introduced well and is thoroughly explained. It is very direct and makes teh reader wnat to continue with teh essay. One quotation that is very well chosen is, " Be patient hand, I do this for you." (59). This is because that particular quote is supportive of your thesis and is well-used in your paragraph. It flows well with the entire essay and is supported and explained well.
Your essay does a variety of things fairly decent. Your organization is phenominal. Your essay is put together nicely and the words flow through the piece. Your word choice and introduction are also rather good. Your adjectives are descriptive, used well in the sentece, and show high intellectual ability because they show good vocabulary. Your introduction is enticing and exciting. The only constructive criticism I have is that the ending seems to be a bit abrupt and not tie up all losse ends throughout the essay. Good job overall Jacob

Anonymous said...

I think that your thesis is very strong. It is clear as well as concise. You don't waver from the thesis that you chose to do. I found the thesis engaging because I didn't think that Santiago really needed to keep his sanity. I was interested to hear your opinion on the subject.

My favorite quotation is the one in the second paragraph where Santiago is talking to himself in the second person. It is interesting that he chose to do this. I think he might have started to think and talk in the second person so that it would be like someone else was there and urging him on.

Your essay is organized very well. You decided to start with one of the harder challenges to argue your point with. I also found it intriguing how you managed to connect all of these challenges to the sea. The sea gives Santiago his living, but at the same time it has taken his youth and his sanity.

The only errors I found were grammatical errors. There were a few times when you forget apostrophes or typed in a wrong letter. Those sorts of things take away from the essay because the reader has to stop and try and figure out what exactly you meant.