The sun bore down on the pavement surrounding the pool. Bare feet pounded on the cement and chased each other in circles. The town park was always busy on summer Sundays. Kids splashed in the pool, and a pick-up baseball game was going on in the field. A group of young ten-year-old girls sat in the shade of an umbrella, chattering away.
“My daddy’s getting me a doll for my birthday,” Christy bragged to her friends. “That’s better than any of your presents,” she said smugly. Her perfect golden ringlets bounced as she swung her head over to her father.
“Right Daddy? My present’s the best, right?”
Tracy watched the girls from the water. Usually being in the water and swimming alleviated all her worries, but right now she just wished she was back home and had never moved to a new town. Her plain features and southern accent didn’t fit in with these fancy girls and their rich clothing.
Tracy never wanted to move to begin with. Her parents had decided that farming was no longer a profitable business, and it was time to try their luck elsewhere. However, Tracy had had plenty of friends back home, but up here she couldn’t get these girls to like her. Christy and her cohorts refused to speak to her. Tracy had tried befriending them at the beginning of the summer, when they had first encountered each other at the town pool. She had greeted them with a wave and a huge grin on her face, and they just laughed and walked away. Their cruel nature had deterred Tracy from trying to make friends with anyone else at the pool. Now she just came to swim. Well, to swim and to see Charlie.
Right now Charlie was having a conversation with Christy. Actually, Christy was talking, and Charlie was looking longingly at the baseball field.
Charlie was only ten, but he knew he was going to play baseball for the New York Yankees someday. There was absolutely no question about it. He practiced every day of the summer, and right now Christy was cutting into his practice time. He didn’t care about what doll Christy was going to get for her eleventh birthday. Now, if Tracey was talking to him it might be a different story. Charlie thought she was really interesting. She was unique, coming from some place far away. Plus, she actually seemed to really care about swimming, just how he cared about baseball. The best part; she wasn’t obsessed with a stupid doll. However, she didn’t seem even the slightest bit interested being friends with him. In fact, every time Charlie went over to talk to her she ducked underwater and swam away.
“My dolly’s going to have a lacy skirt and a red dress over it, and her hair will be tied up with a bow. It’ll be a pink bow. Actually, pink and white. Pink with white polka dots. Oh, and her hair is blonde just like mine…” Christy said, while batting her eyes at Charlie.
“Charlie,” she whined. “Are you even listening?”
“I think that your doll is very, um, interesting,” Charlie said, while staring over his shoulder into the pool where Tracy was treading water. “I have to go now,” he said, and walked as fast as he could over to the edge of the pool nearest to Tracy. As he approached she dove underwater and swam away. Slightly disappointed, Charlie decided to return to his baseball game.
Tracy wished Charlie wouldn’t come over. He was obviously good friends with Christy and her buddies, and it was clear that they were planning something. I mean, who couldn’t tell, with the amount of time he spent glancing over at her, and the speed at which Christy was talking. Those girls should just leave her alone. Tracy wasn’t going to let them make fun of her again.
The crack of a bat, the yell of ‘CANNONBALL!’ and the laughs of children made up the song of summer. An ice cream truck’s jingle added to the composition. Kids flocked to the truck, hoping for something to lessen the heat of the day. The baseball game was broken up, and even Christy and her friends raised themselves from their shady spot to go get some ice cream.
Tracy realized it was an opportunity to get out of the pool undisturbed and go home. She dried herself off and pulled on shorts and a t-shirt, swung one leg over her bike, and began to pedal. She stopped at the sidewalk to wait for the ice cream truck to leave and for the flock of kids to diffuse. As soon as she stopped she realized it was a mistake. Christy and her friends menacingly approached her with their ice creams and vicious smiles.
“Oh, is the new girl too poor to buy an ice cream?” one of Christy’s friends teased.
“The farmer girl makes her own ice cream.” Christy replied. “She’s too good for our ice cream truck.’
“How does she make the ice cream?” Christy’s friend asked, playing along.
“From the cows.” Christy answered. “She’s good friends with the cows.”
Moos and giggles came from the group of girls.
“I think she is a cow!” called out one of the girls. “A big, ugly cow! Moooo!”
They walked back to the pool laughing, and left Tracy sitting on her bike, with tears in her eyes. This wasn’t fair! Tracy never did anything to hurt them; she had been as nice as possible. Why did they feel the need to be so nasty? And Charlie was coming over too. As if they hadn’t made enough fun of her for one day. Tracy hopped on the bike and pedaled as fast as she could.
“No, Tracy, wait!” Charlie called after her. “Tracy!” he yelled, and ran after her.
She stopped pedaling, and hopped off her bike.
“What do you want?” she said, with more coldness in her voice than she had meant.
“I, I mean I-,” Charlie faltered for a second, and then continued. “I just wanted to say that I think that it’s horrible how those girls are treating you, and that I don’t think you’re a cow at all. Actually, I think cows are kinda pretty. So I do think you’re a cow, because I think you’re really pretty. I mean, I don’t- oh, never mind.”
Tracy smiled in spite of herself. Encouraged, Charlie continued.
“Anyways, I like you a lot, and I want you to have this.” He offered his ice cream to Tracy. Now she was really smiling. Charlie actually meant what he was saying. Tracy took the ice cream.
“Thanks,” she said softly, and kissed him on the cheek. He blushed a vibrant shade of red.
“Ew, Charlie’s got cooties!” Charlie’s friends from the baseball team called from the sidewalk.
“Do not!” he said defiantly, and chased after his friends.
Tracy stayed by her bike and licked her ice cream cone. Maybe it wasn’t that bad living here. Maybe some people did like her enough to be her friend. She didn’t need everyone to love her, especially not Christy and her crowd. Tracy had a friend who liked her enough to buy her ice cream, and that was really all anyone could ask for.
Monday, January 8, 2007
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12 comments:
LOVED your story Connie!
:) K's Mom :)
The word choice and details in your story were fantastic. The 'song of summer' and the first paragraph had great description. The story had a nice moral, and made you really feel bad for Tracy. Great story!
connie nice story great details and i still cant beleive that... TEN YEAR OLDS KISSING!!! other wise great detail made the story so much more interesting.
This was a really well written story with a lot of details, and it had a nice plot to it. The title really represents the story and draws the reader in. NIce Job!!
A very descriptive story, that made the reader feel various emotions. Anger towards the malicious intented girls, sympathy for the child with no friends; and of course the thought of "Aw how cute," right at the end. It wasn't my favorite short story in the orld, but it was pretty good all around.
Details especially, as well as magnificient characterization.
Good Work
loved the story connie :]
very descriptive and really made you see how Tracy was feeling. now if only it was mayonnaise instead of ice cream ;]
awwww, this is just too cute. Your story was very detailed and I'm not sure what you call it....but I think realistic is a good word. There was a lot of emotion and the behaviors of the girls just seemed right. Your story was really well thought out and the plot was very smooth. Your title is gresat oo, it really fits the story because even though the girls are mean, the ending is postive like the title suggests. The kiss was cute :]]
Too cute! I can't believe how much amazing details you managed to put into this! The story can relate to many people as well. I love how innocent Tracey was and how kind the Charlie was. Your title grabbed my attention immediately and intruded me to read on.
I'd have to agree with Nikki but other than that I thought you had a exceptional story. The plot was cute and kept you intrigued until the very end. Love the fact that it was a summer setting:)Superb job!
Dear Connie,
Thst is about the best short story I have ever read. I wonder where you got the idea for the boy Charlie who likes baseball? Hm... Well it has been said that you should write about those things that you really know!
wonderful creative work!
connie your story was so cute. it really related to my childhood i always remember fighting with girls about little things. your story was very detailed and i could picture everything. you can have mixed emotions about the story between feeling angry towards the group of girls and feeling bad for tracy and then the cute ending!
Cute characters. Realistic dialogue and descriptions (Charlie was having a conversation with Christy. Actually, Christy was talking, and Charlie was looking longingly at the baseball field.) make this a fun, light read.
You articulate well the challenges children face when moving to a new home. Acceptance from pre-established groups can be difficult, especially if you have differences that make you unique.
Eventually though, personality wins over, as Charlie becomes smitten with Tracy. I like their interaction at the end, with Charlie saying cows are pretty, trying to turn that into a compliment. Even though he doesn't quite succeed, Tracy thinks the attempt is sweet.
I liked that lightheartedness.
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